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how can i forget you, how can i  be expected to give this up, all the memories of you  and all the times we had, all those blissful moments  of joy when we were together, best friends  i still love you so completely.   
and how, how, am i expected to get over that  how can i forget, how can i move on when you  you are still so much a part of me, my heart bleeds  as i remember those last words you said to me.   
and they hurt, but then my friend talks me through it  and makes me believe that maybe it wasnt you, maybe  there is hope, she knows the whole story and things  that
L.A.W.
by *samjo27

Upon reading this, my first thoughts were "Does [the author] really want critique on this piece?" And I'm still not sure. The piec...

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The dryers hum, the Pacific carving its heavy tongue  against California's back, crooked as a stretch mark,  a Hispanic woman huddled close, shouting  at her three kids; she folds their ripped jeans.  An elderly man counts coins, asks a nearby couple  for change as their tattoos sideswipe, their kiss  separating like the quarters they give him.  The washers gurgle their compliance   
as my laundry revolves. The world revolves,  people fucking and killing, eating and sleeping,  the sun still rising the next day. The cycle stops,  the white shirt still mottled with ketchup, orange now;
Laundromat
by ^fllnthblnk

This piece is very bi-polar, and I almost feel like you could make two completely different pieces out of it (perhaps, in a 'art On...

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Why I Wouldlet's look at this  objectively, okay?  i mean, if a gift  is supposed to mean  something special  to you, then why is  it i should feel  obligated to buy  it from a store  or from a private  seller or buy it  at all, just be-  cause the calendar  happens to mark  the twenty-fifth  day of the month  marked december?  look, all i'm  saying is that  if you don't think  
that jesus is real,  
then why should  
christmas be real?  if you don't practice  or believe in the  religion that pro-  pagates this belief,   Why I Would
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Nothing I can Do or Say that-hasn't been told  -hasn't been heard   
-hasn't been written  -hasn't been read   
-hasn't been seen  -hasn't been tried   
-hasn't been thought of  -won't be forgotten Nothing I can Do or Say that
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Immortalpage by page  burn your legacy  collapse into semantics  won't bare your teeth  won't clench your fist  won't walk away from your own funeral   
and you won't die a second time  you won't live another life  you won't say another word   
we live our lives outside ourselves as if we were secondary  given time, you'll realize that everything is temporary  all our lives, we brace in anticipation of the end  and in doing so, we forget to live  [life is only hindered by your death]   
you're not immortal  just spout your morals  tell yourself its working Immortal
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twelve - FootstepsI followed in the footsteps  of my woman's sister's man  upon meeting the woman  married to my lady's dad.   
She said, "What a perfect boy!  He's tall, polite, and handsome!"  Easy when those footsteps are  a tattoo-laden felon's. twelve - Footsteps
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Thu Mar 19, 2009, 4:25 PM
  • Mood: Exhilarated
  • Listening to: Kyuss
  • Reading: 1984
I bought a subscription. I'm not sure what to do with it, other than sport my super sweet asterisk. Revel in my internet glory.

I've been reading 1984.

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~moondrunk Sep 14, 2009, 8:20:53 PM
read read
read read read
read
there is no other way
'cept through the eyes

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"My little old man and I fell out;
I'll tell you what 'twas all about,--
I had money and he had none,
And that's the way the noise begun."
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*intimachine Sep 16, 2009, 10:25:01 PM
braille

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Band I play guitar in. Post-hardcore punk rock with some freakin' heart.
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~moondrunk Sep 17, 2009, 12:19:59 AM
...HAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!

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"My little old man and I fell out;
I'll tell you what 'twas all about,--
I had money and he had none,
And that's the way the noise begun."
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^fllnthblnk Sep 23, 2009, 9:29:48 PM
PWND!

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Clearfield Review: Prose, Poetry, Art.
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*intimachine Sep 21, 2009, 10:47:17 PM
i know right

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Intimachine
Band I play guitar in. Post-hardcore punk rock with some freakin' heart.
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`leoraigarath May 6, 2009, 1:42:54 AM
Hello :wave:

Just dropping by to thank you for the :+devwatch: and the faves you left me :hug: thank you so much for your support, I really appreciate it! :heart:

- Omri
( `leoraigarath )

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Some days I write those words, others they write me.
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~IAmPoetry Apr 11, 2009, 8:35:07 PM
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:iconthankswatch1plz::iconthankswatch2plz:

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Poetry is truly boundless. It is my passion, writing to you, that is. I am the canvas.
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my poetry, lemon
both bitter and tart
you decide the taste of my art

©iampoetry
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*intimachine Apr 12, 2009, 10:32:17 AM
:ahoy:

:glomp:

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Band I play guitar in. Post-hardcore punk rock with some freakin' heart.
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~maiziedog Apr 11, 2009, 5:16:33 PM
Heather says, "Hello, Hagrid."

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╰☆╮мαιzιε [l.σ.ν.є.ѕ.] уσυ!╰☆╮
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